Lure Fly Eyes
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Let me know what you think of this song I wrote. I can take criticism. Grade 1-10. I'm 15 and a boy?
“Unsure”
Tumbleweed rolls along the floor
Prickly sticks cut up my feet
I’m telling you I’m not emotional
I’m just unsure
Willow tree blocks light from the outside
Hammock rocks back and forth
There’s room for two
I wanna be next to you
Firefly catches my attention
Eyes fly back and forth, can’t make up their mind
I can’t tell what’s up or down
Flip over, hit the ground
Don’t try to lure me in
I’m unsure who to let in
Magnets form around me
Let me see, where can begin
Is there a cure
I’m unsure, I know I’ve sinned
Life is great and grand
I’m living on no man’s land
Watch for every sleight of hand
I demand from you, whoever’s out there
I don’t know what I’ve done wrong
One second I’m there
The next I’m gone
Nice, I like it! That's good for a 15-year old boy. I like the imagery and they're powerful lyrics. Good going, Soccer12, keep going with it. Putting a tune to it yet?
Mikhaela
EDIT: Oh, a rating, sorry. 8.5 
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